Should "Lochheed" be "Lockheed" ?
Edit needed in the second paragraph, words have been repeated. "Of a fighter of a fighter". One of the 'of a fighter' needs to be removed. Otherwise I was getting deeply into the story when this phrase clashed and brought me out of the zone!
I am not really interested in WWIII and the creation of the Archangels, from the main series, it's implied Tyke? was a member of the team that built them and he said that he and Eric had caught Stephanos sneaking in many times and Tyke was absent from the entire book.
No doubt others will enjoy this series and maybe even I maybe won over...
read every book oy you- to my knwledge that is - and this is a nice backgroud story. love your style.
The next day, Morgan showed up with his kit in tow and made his way through the narrow passages of the Omaha, first to the Captains quarters where he dropped off the two cases that contained everything he was taking to sea, and then he made his war forward to the command deck.
way forward
“Speaking as one, I should probably take offense but I honestly can’t entirely disagree,” Eric chuckled. “You don’t get behind the stick of a fighter of a fighter unless you want to be there
Repetition
race nodded thoughtfully. Pilots were hardly alone in that, she knew. SeALs and pretty much any special operations unit were the same. The competition was too fierce for any other type to succeed.
SEALs
Looks like a great start to a prequel and I want to see more! Saw a few little bumps in there, but not much. Let me know if you need a proof reader or copy editor.
Best regards,
Keith