Looks like the chapter designations need looking at, two chapters with the same number, another chapter number missing...
Still the story is good, don't know yet if the Imp Commander is going to be the next bad guy character or will be 'enlightened' to be an anti-hero, would like to see another Imperial world rise up to challenge Kraike.
“Let’s calm the Calm the skipper’s nerves,
That just doesn't sound right to me
To much "calm" and an extra (the) I think
My bad.”Not your fault, slipper bastards.
Slippery
im really enjoying this book thanks
Patiscynical: what i know they just talked about having a free place for him, they left it open.
This was a good chapter. Throwing Eric into the fire like that. I was surprised he got the shakes, initially, but it makes good sense
In the earlier chapters it was Eric going to the casino, not Amanda. Confusing
On hell Yah!!!!!!
Proof bit: Should the first word of the chapter be "watch" as opposed to "what"?
Dang this chapter is to short
Right at the beginning
What your right now. Watch instead of what
What your eight low, boss, should be "Watch your eight low, boss,"
Chapter 29:
but the activity and tension she was experience was
- experiencing
Roy said, somewhat uncessisarily to Cardsharp’s mind.
- unnecessarily
they’ll pulp your in your armor like a squeezed fruit juice.”
- you
Not looking for typo's anymore. This is a Great Space Opera you have out done yourself
beam fire from blow the Flames aft quarter ???
No idea wich the right one is
. Armor grade metal just vaporised under the tuned energy weapons << vaporized
moving to the protected inner decks were the command deck would be. << decks where
, but the enemy were moved focused on the door and only a couple were firing back << were focused ?
, and not ever enemy ship had fallen in the final battle << not every
Only ships powered by the massive singularity reactors or Priminae and Imperial vessels could create, or hold, an entity << reactors of
… Eric who handled those situation << situations
His logical mind told him that there was no way they could significant change that. << significantly
“But their has to be something we can do.” << there
Neither group really wanted to thrown in with the Priminae << throw?
“There is at one interesting contract in the batch,” << at least [or] that ?
. “Are their any new breakthroughs there?” << "Are there"?
Over the centuries, likely millennia or more, or drifting through space it had slipped << "of drifting"
“Another location just as regulated, again by necessity… but that won’t change the way they thing,” <<"think"
all of them young fools to his way or thinking << "of thinking"
“but some of them are really pushing my tolerance, let me tell you. The Empire was bad, but at least they’d just kill you and be done with it, you now?” << "know"
Not that any of them knew that the Marines were anything other than Mercenaries for hire, particular not that they were from Terra… << "particularly"?
Oh I saw something that didn't look right, but I got so wrapped up in the chapter I lost it. Damn this is good
So there's a typo somewhere, you find it. but keep these chapter coming
Nice Evan nice
I'm happy you're writing a new book, but saddened that there was no eleventh hour rescue for Eric Weston.
Also, so many errors. I bet any one if your fans would proofread and correct your books for free. Think about it, please.
But their has to be --> But there has to be
they thing --> they think
thought it lost -> though it lost
great cliffhanger !!! came in circle -- drasin again!!
Chapter 24 is lost
Love your book!
Now here's a chapter to get one's heart.
Question: You've come up with innovated ways in the past to defeat, or incorporate, anomalous weapons or created new weapons in moments of desperation. Given any thoughts to a weapon that converts energy into matter? There are innumerable weapons/innovations that convert matter into energy, but few that reverse the prosses converting energy back into matter? Think of the advantages of a system that converted heat (heat, light/laser, and other forms of electromagnetic energy (radiation)) into something with mass - solves one of the problems you have with black-hole camouflage not to mention what you could do if weaponized. (Here's a real world reference: Brookhaven Lab's: "Collisions of Light Produce Matter/Antimatter from Pure Energy" - can you spare a few terawatts of power for a loyal reader). You might also remember the "pale-blue light" between the Ronako and the Drasin ship (Into the Black). Here are a few other avenues of scientific thought to stroll down if you are so inclined: Hawkens wondered if the event horizon of a black hole from which no energy or matter could escape and wasn't in fact just a boundary which prevented matter and energy from escaping from within the black hole and that energy/matter wasn't actually destroyed when initially passing into the event horizon. (Might explain origins of our friends like Odysseus (I get the impression they emerged from the black hole drives of the new star ships. And then there is the mysterious subatomic particle, the gluon, remove it and the particle fails apart (become massless - dark matter?), add more and the mass of the particle increases - can you say "Crunch!".