Name: Gary Hughes (Anonymous) · Datum: 30 Jul 2023 13:40:18 · Für: Chapter 1

Typos:

tossing the beg from his shoulder.
it wasn’t any skin of his nose.
No, he actually hadn’t been going to do that, mind.

Name: hendrik (Anonymous) · Datum: 05 May 2023 5:11:29 · Für: Chapter 1

like it! makes you wonder what follows

Name: george foster (Anonymous) · Datum: 22 Mar 2023 20:05:27 · Für: Chapter 1

I like this version much better. I'm aiting to see what comes next.

Name: seadragonlady (Anonymous) · Datum: 11 Mar 2023 14:48:52 · Für: Chapter 1

Interesting start. Would continue reading.

Name: Keith Hancock (Anonymous) · Datum: 08 Jan 2023 7:45:31 · Für: Chapter 1

Feels like a good start to me.  Sets up who I presume will be the main character without giving a whole lot of background on him.  I am assuming this is in the future, but not post-apocalyptic.

I look forward to seeing more of this.

Name: sapper06 (Anonymous) · Datum: 07 Jan 2023 17:44:36 · Für: Chapter 1

Much better start.

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