The car was waiting when he hit the lobby, the uniformed officer standing at the door as Eriuc tossed his
Eric
Victory wasn't determine until one side gave up... or
S/b determined?
Safely dispensing with the radiation and dust particulates the warp field gathered during even short FTL transits were a significant safety procedures that warp vessels had to follow
nit, unnecessary 'a' imho
Troubles came to her here, politely worded and veiled in subtlty
do you mean subtly?
For all that, however, it was clear that the could not stand face to face with the Empire if she have that final order.
The?
I have been reading On Silver Wings, and having a bit of a challenge getting my thoughts back to this series. A cast of characters would be great.
Also, if you have a better way for me to provide feedback, I can only do one copy/paste at a time.
Love this chapter, but still a couple mistakes in first section
A Ensign Straight should obviously be An Ensign, but Straight as a name?
"So me the readings." should be "Show me the readings."
Ch. 1. Good intro. Should looking be lurking in “Squabbling amongst ourselves while there’s a existential threat looking is…”
I enjoyed it. Not sure what else to say.
One small edit...
Imbecilic racial. not imbecilic radial.
Now all we need are the Drasin to throw some fire in the mix. Actually would be a good time for them to attack with the Empire being distracted and so many fleets pulled out.
Precursor race returning? Another near-human xeno race that the entities know of?
I like the way you're bringing in many of the different characters and situations from the previous novels. (Good ole Dr. Palin! And nasty earth politics.) It also seems like maybe you're setting up a new factor - are there other aliens out there who could be a threat to the Empire, Priminae, and Earthers? But you're also doing a good job of keeping the ball hidden so we can't see what's coming. I'll keep reading, and hope that this time you get someone from Audible or your publisher interested in audio version as well.
Welp, dark times have fallen on the earth. The empire is sending a massive force, and no one seems to think victory is possible. Not even Gaia. But we readers believe. We hope the author has another trick up his sleeve, so the adventure can continue.
Under AEV Boudicca -Two minor spelling errors (underlined): ... now is not the time to be holding back." It's the energy consumption....."
It should be
'the shuttle had landed and disembarked' or disembarking.
You missed a do in 'we not expect the Empire to invade.'
Shouldn't Hyatt be suspecting a 'birth' of a sentient Boudicca at this point. The only previous unexplained power fluctuations in a Heroic led to Odysseus becoming sentient.
Don't like the idea of Stephanos blowing up Priminae infrastructure, and will be interested in how Milla Chans feel about it.
"... I had special "date" scheduled tonight"
Happy sigh, another Odyssey fix consumed - keep up the good work.
Minor observation, spelling errors: "Secured withing the Priminae control cernter ..." to "Secured within the Priminae control center ..."
I'm wondering if we'll see any more of the Kardashev type II inventions reintroduced like the black goop torpedoes from King of Thieves, and now that the ROE have changed, a reappearance of the Darsin "blue" death ray (from "Into the Black) that converts human energy into ship repairing matter. Perhaps Sol can help out with a little extra energy/gravitational adjustment (solar flare or some other reshaping of the heliosphere). How about a torpedo with some of that exotic matter fired by transition torpedo into one of the two the singularity of an enemy cruiser causing it to become unstable? (Although I maybe missing the mark by quite a bit, it seems to me that these Gods (Sol, Gia Central and the Emperor) all require their interactions/manipulation of humans to give themself purpose. For without purpose there is no need to exist.
Wonderfull
This better be good, Burt. I had a special data scheduled tonight,” One of the men sent him a look that was annoyance crossed with braggadocio
Data should be date.
I thought the gunships were a match for the parasite destroyers? Working together with the Vorpal fighters, that would keep the parsites too busy to co-ordinate attacks on the Terran cruisers. Sorry, I dislike the word Solan. I recognise you wanting to be individual, but I prefer Terran or even Solar above Solan.
I love this series Evan. Thanks for the suspense and intrigue!
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Missing word: "It was even possible that they were right, at least TO some degree."
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At the end of Silma Venn's thoughts, he might recollect that Rael had only dealt with professional military people, not these people who seem more interested in ascending to some throne of power.
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Chapter seems short. Ideas that keep it close to characters and not activity:
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- Eric wondering about Steph's safety
- Rael and the Priminae's ponderings
Other thoughts.
- Can Odysseus 'hear' activties on Earth?
- I forgot if Guia met Odysseus; is Guia going to converse with the sentient ship?
- Might Guia via Odysseus converse with Central?
- Might Graycen ask Guia what she could do to enemy ships in low orbit?
- Is Graycen using absorbtion/cloaking technology on her Kardashev Net hardware?
- Might the technique Odysseus used to super speed through the enemy be incorporated by the coalition?
- What has been garnered from the captured Empire captain? That info collection process might be interesting.
- What is being done w/ all the captives?
- Any thought of releasing frozen Drazin on an Empire world, ideally it's HQ?
- Where are the escaped Drazin, they can't all be gone.
- What IS Steph's mission? He needs to be more effective w/ gathering and returing intelligence.
- Can Steph do some destruction using conventional Empire technology, leaving the culprit a mystery?
- Maybe Steph does an operation and transitions away once hiden behind a moon or astroid.
- Are there factions in the Empire?
- What does the Empire's ruler think of her friend gone missing?
Possibly more thoughts after I re-listen to some of your creativity! Ralph
Mr. Currie, you certainly are building up the tension. Keep it going. Hope this isn't another two-parter.
Solan Fleet?
I can't stop reading, this is terrific stuff Eric
Still a wonderfull incredible book
Hello Mr. Currie, I won't let myself read the chapters and story before the whole book comes out (as I've read all the previous novels), but I'd just like to compliment your writing ability and your imagination, I don't read much in this genre besides this, but overall I consider your stories very interesting and thought provoking. I ask you wholeheartedly to keep it up and keep inspiring us with your ideas. Also, I do enjoy your forays into the characters' different internal opinions and feelings towards technologies and the like, but I must add that I don't enjoy the repetitiveness of the beginning of each book, as many of the technologies and ideas that the characters are thinking about are very repetitive and don't offer much more. For example, over the book series that you have written, the idea and concept of the transition drive is repeated more than a few times, especially at the beginning of different books. The repetitiveness is more apparent because even though the characters each have a slightly different approach to "explaining it to themselves" (for the reader), the explanations are almost repeated with little to no differences between opinions or feelings. I understand you must provide context for first time readers, but most readers are not starting halfway through the series where they would need this context, I feel that most readers probably became hooked on the first book and proceeded to read the rest of them in order similar to my experience.
Other than this, I highly enjoy the series and look forward to reading about the exploits of Odysseus and Weston in King's fall!
Hey Evan, I know from book 4 we been reading about weaponizing the singularity of the Heroic Class Ship. Now that we have way too many ships and few personnel, do you think we can sacrifice a Heroic by creating a black hole in the middle of an Empirial fleet. Also by now the Priminae should be smart enough to accept that installing torpedoes in a heroic is not as crazy as facing extinction