Two chapters in just one day! Love it!
Now you have the book cover: Odysseus and Boadicea fisghtin on the hull while the other ship is behind them
I love it
Boudica or Boudicca, known in Latin chronicles as Boadicea or Boudicea, and in Welsh as Buddug, was a queen of the British Iceni tribe who led an uprising against the conquering forces of the Roman Empire in AD 60 or 61
hehehehe super idea 💡
Oh lord. Evan you have figured out a nice way to involve the entities I live this path you have entered upon. Just thinking ahead/guessing what to singularities can achieve is priceless. Thanks Evan
Odysseus paused at a junction, pensively looking down on way before turning to look down the other.
One way?
but it was one that helped him compile his thoughts in a way that human could understand
a human? Humans?
Love the twist in this chapter! Nice, something NEW.
Evy tilted her head slightly to one side, as thought thinking, an affectation she had never quite managed to be done of to his knowledge.
Though
managed to be done of to his...?.?
but I think the Empire’s recent actions is going to rewrite this rules.”
these?
With properly trained personnel being at such a premium, it was inevitably that the Odysseus
Inevitable?
Hovering in place for a moment, as thought standing on pillars of flame,
Though rather than thought?
Secured withing the Priminae control cernter,
Within?
Well, the Empire’s orders are unambiguous,” Eric said first, “They’re effectively called for genocide.
they?
but civilians infrastructure and such are now on the list of acceptable targets.
civilian or civilian's
I had a special data scheduled tonight,
Date?
He was a leader of men, not a command of starships
in command? Commander?
That superweapon. We still known nothing about it.
know?
The Empire was an existential threat to humanity - use this instead 'The Empire was a threat to humanity's existence'
Thus far, they'd denied him the option to speak, but really he understood (not - 'understand') why.
He then felt it fade, a… he had no word for it, expect perhaps a righteous anger supplanting the fear.
Odysseus didn’t understand.except?
they cross in our protected with a force like that
Seems to be missing something
So me the readings, she ordered. Should be 'show'.
Also, another living ship? I don't know if I like that idea or not. Guess I'll find out, lol
Seriously? Another living ship? I think it'll be great, but I'll have to reserve judgement until the end.
Also, change 'So' me the readings, to 'show'.
Dr Palin is gonna help, yay! He's such an interesting character.
You need to change 'thought' to 'though', -as thought she were thinking
There sentence doesn't make sense: 'He waved to the greetings sent his way'...
Like the intro, & book so far. Great start to remind us what's going on.
There are a few word choices, I'd change.
The speaker continued to demand order 'amidst' the chaos (not among)
Stanton - standing at parade rest 'awaiting' (not waiting)
Existential - perhaps 'Extinction' - also should be 'an existential' not A
Squabbling among ourselves while ... threat is looming (not looking)
Eric listened as the squabbling wound down, mostly (not most)
He was a leader of men, not a 'command' of starships. Should be 'command'.
We still 'known' nothing about it. Should be 'know'.
Love it! Another new wrinkle. Looks like this story has been percolating in your brain for a while. It kind of reminds me of the first book, with so many different settings and characters. Keep it up.
This could be the best book yet. Some typos but overal excellent.
Leaving this enemy to fester out of fear of what they might do now would almost certainly result in them becoming a forces that could,
force
civilian researches.
civilian researchers
fundamental limits to how much we can build up, even wit the support of the Priminae
With the support
Eric winced, “Damn. They’ve made their call then.”
“It would see so.”Seem so
Wonderfull book.
The Colonel said, turning backf or a second before he again
Turning back for