We can turn planets into funeral pyres,” Weston said with no hint of exaggeration, “Given that the location of our strategic weapon is possibly the most highly classified bit of intel we have, if we choose to… we could burn the entire Empire to cinders, even if they nukes us first.”
Yes sir.” The Colonel said, turning backf or a second before he again twisted to check on Eric, “Door open or closed, Sir?”
“Yes, Ma’am. I’ll sent the invitation, and I believe he was summoned to the Pentagon before being directed to the Odysseus, Ma’am.”
She didn’t bother to reprimand the speaker, thought the words were out of line.
a taught bent back design
a taunt bent back design?
Eric decided. “One form each of you, if you’re willing
Eric decided. “One from each of you, if you’re willing?
I just don't see the people of the empire being anything other than arrogant. So when Misrem says she had good teachers, it sounds more like something the Terrans would say. It doesn't fit the image of the Empire that you've given us. IMO, anyway.
Boudicca’s instinct was TO arc the shot
Anyway still loving how the book is going
Hi there. Long time fan of your work here. Thank you for making your writing process interactive this time. It is a great experience seing a novel being written live (nearly). My review won't be about various typo. There are already plenty of pelople doing that. It would be more about the story itself. You see, one of your various works strong point for me, is the engagement. I am always highly engaged while reading your various work. For me, chapter 24 is problematic. Since chapter 21, you've written only about Earth vs Imperial battle. Chapter 24 in my opinion, broke the flow of Earth vs Imperial battle storyline. It also broke the tension of that storyline and my engagement. It would be better in my opinion to move up chapter 24 to right after chapter 20, and completely focus on Earth vs Imperial battle from chapter 21 untill battle concludes.
Anyway that's my thought on it so far. Keep up the good work.
Hi, I'm a big fan and I couldn't believe my luck finding this chapters while searching the news on when I could expect the next part of your Saga...
I read already 24 chapters and I liked it a lot!
I suppose though, you left this comment section to get some more detail feedback, perhaps event for each chapter separately.
Here are some of my thoughts:
The first chapter is long and hard to focus on- seems too me too much on the politicians. Perhaps something about the forming mind of Boudica would be the eleme t to gain interest and to introduce the concept.
I was also looking for more adventures of Steph and his crew.
Generally, Baudica is comming out of the blue and in the next minute she is an obedient crew member -it took much longer for Odysseus to form....
Also, I have a feeling that parts with Imperatress are too long and not really adding anything. Maybe You could extend her interaction with the eniy faking her father. Maybe even she may start noticing some strange details about it and grow dubt about its identity?
In case you would like to respond to me, my email is jackluka@gmail.com
Thanks for you talent!
Best
Jack
Eric knew that his ships were needed desperately, not just not now ...but in the
but they were nowhere near sufficient to take his ships. //. faster and faster and as the delay
fast and loose with previously previous jealously guarded hole cards
information about the current situation in the room he found himself in than anywhere in the Sol system
I need political advice, and possible possibly
her eyes found the blue icon that was current currently centered around a star a little over twenty lightyears from Sol.
What exactly that left, well he was
UN-certain.
Jesan somehow knew deep in his core
The enemy ships ship they’d been monitoring all along were was still there (*imperial fleet had seen only 1 Priminae ship).
“Order to Third Fleet, advice to ever one else,
“Order to Third Fleet, advice to every one else, ?
but we didn’t detecte the launches
but we didn’t detect the launches ?
“No, but it necessary." - not sure what you wanted here
“No, but it was necessary."?
Phenomenal writing as per usual! I can't wait to read the full book. The odyssey one series has been my favorite book series for half a decade now and I'm glad it's still being written!
A short but heavy on introspection chapter.
I enjoyed it and did not see any type of graphic errors or grammar errors.
since he was looking at a force that more than tripled the available cruisers that the Colonies could put into the field
Why? The forge seemed able to produce 8 ships for the admiral, along with that many again for themselves, to fight the Drasin. So why so few ships?
“Yes sir, I think we’re looking at s resource system for materials used to produce ship hulls,” the Duty Officer said, frowning slightly, “what we can’t find is their Forge.”
This sentence doesn't make sense as it is
Do you have some estimated when the next chapters will be released?
A flicker of hesitation could be see seen, a moment
Eric leaned forward from where he was sitting
The only time we have had power issues outside of combat
retreating through the corridors as the presence have gave pursuit,
leaving his him breathing a sigh of relief
just a much flatter initial ramping up pace compared to a doubling ever week or so.
I had a special data date scheduled tonight,”
Used their instead of they're
"That is good… is it now not?"
If they cross in our protected space with a force like that,
The Empire is moving, probably against Earth, and they didn’t bother to let us in on it.” - Steph should consider the signal they barely picked up leaving system, may not have given Mich time to inform them as a possibility. Seems strange that is not even considered
"If this goes down as we’re expecting… it’s not going to matter.”
Eric tipped his head, “With Well, Mack Gillum, I’ll be back
Eric waved casually as the door unsealed and he casually lightly dropped down
Yes, Ma’am. I’ll sent send the invitation, and
conference room and immediately came to a stop and immediately went to attention, saluting